Downloading music without paying is stealing and could destroy the music industry. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is said that we are reaching a new period in history. Modern life seems to be easier and more comfortable than ever. We have every single thing we need and, which is probably more dangerous, every single thing that we want. We can watch a film, or listen to a song which we have not bought. Is this fair?
On the one hand, the music industry is being seriously affected in an extremely horrible way. If we continue with this behaviour a lot of people will lose their jobs. Moreover, it could be seen as immoral because you are having access to something that is not yours.
On the other hand, buying a CD which costs more than 20 € is probably something that not everybody who wants to listen to music can afford.
To conclude, I would like to say that I am not against downloading music for free, but I understand that it is something illegal and unfair.

Write about a Halloween party or any other party where you went wearing a disguise.

Not a long time I was a little kid who wanted to become a Doctor. I was that obsessed that every single time I could, I used to wear my mother’s white coat. She worked as a nurse and she always had several hospital items at home.
Two years ago, I had a party where I had to wear “something different”. I didn’t have an idea about what to wear in order to be an original guest. I asked my mother and she reminded me what I used to like when I was a little boy. I went with her to the hospital and I got a surgeon pyjamas. I arrived at the party dressed up like a doctor, with gloves and with a fluorescent syringe.
I had a great time at that party. I met five or six girls who wanted to become “my nurse”, so it can be said that I was a successful surgeon.

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    3 Responses to “Could you check if there´s any grammatical mistake in this compositions? 5 stars?”

    1. Joseph

      1) I would change "but I understand that it is something illegal and unfair" to "but I understand that it is illegal and unfair on members of the music industry/artists/people who actually pay for music" (whoever you want to pick.

      2) "Not a long time AGO I was a little kid"

      3) I would change "I was that obsessed that every single time I could, I used to wear my mother’s white coat" to "I was so obsessed that I used to wear my mother’s coat whenever I was able to"

      4) "She worked as a nurse and THEREFORE/AS A RESULT she always had several hospital items at home"

      5) "I didn’t have ANY idea"

      6) "she reminded me what I used to like when I was a little boy" to "she reminded me that when I was younger I used to like dressing up as a doctor"

      7) "I got SOME/A PAIR OF surgeon pyjamas"

      8) "I arrived at the party dressed (no up) like a doctor, with gloves and (no with) a fluorescent syringe."

      Overall it is very well written :)

    2. Janie

      On the second prompt: You wrote, "Not a long time I was a little kid.." It should be, "Not a long time ago I was a little kid.."
      Second prompt: "I was that obsessed that every single time I could, I used to.." It should be, "I was so obsessed that every single time I could, I used to.."
      I hope this helps.

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